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Using Quotations o routine announcements whose facts are not questioned 7 upcoming meetings charitable events etc 0 general background information 2192009 When to attribute The reader assumes that the reporter is the source of information that s not attributed 0 action take by Congress or the city council or other agency that the reporter covers All other information needs attribution 0 sources comments and opinions o disputed or sensational facts 0 accusations 0 etc Attribution words SAID is usually the best word for attribution Avoid words such as CONTENDED or CLAIMED They imply that the reporter doesn39t believe the statement SAID is neutral wrong Lee claimed that taxes were already too high right Lee said taxes were already too high right Lee argued that taxes were already too high 2192009 wrong The sehator contended that he wasn39t Be careful how you use these attribution words waffling on the issue According to right The senator said he wasn39t waffling on the Avoid ACCORDING To issue 39 It is passive and ambiguous 7 8 Use ACCORDING TO to referto things that can t O Explained talk Make sure the speaker is explaining not saying According to a State Department report something According to the encyclopedia O Stated 0 Added Only documents and formal announcements are Don t use ADDED as an anemative for SAD stated everything else is said The report STATED that crime is down 8 Use ADDED only the statement is an addition to the percent in the county preVIous statement The president s directive STATED that all refugees would be granted asylum 2192009 0 Revealed Use only when the speaker is disclosing a secret 0 Admitted Avoid using ADMITTED it implies that the speaker was caught in a lie or confessed to a crime Use ADMITTED only in reporting court testimony or in a direct quote O Asked Use ASKED when the speaker asks a question Why didn t the police step in stop them asked Joanne Drew who witnessed the gang attack in the park 0 think or believe Avoid words such as THINK or BELIEVE You39re not a mind reader You only know what people say not what they think rong Lee believes that taxes were already too high correct Lee said he believes that taxes were already too high Lee said taxes were already too high Lee argued that taxes were already too high 0 say vs said SAY is both timeless and gives a sense if immediacy Stephen Hawkings says the universe can be defined in one mathematical equation 2192009 SAY and the use of the present tense is often preferred in feature writing The universe can be defined in one mathematical equation Stephen Hawkings says as he quickly circles the room in his motorized Wheelchair SAID is specific Stephen Hawkings said Saturday that the universe can be defined in one mathematical equation Direct quotations Put quotation marks m around words that are direct quotes which are the exact words the speaker uses If you change the wording remove the quotation marks I am not a crook Nixon told reporters Nixon said he was not a crook From the AP Stylebook Never alter quotations even to correct minor grammatical errors or word usage Casual minortongue slips may be removed by using ellipses but even that should be done with extreme caution lfthere is a question about a quote either don t use it or ask the speakerto clarify Do not routinely use abnormal spellings such as gonna in attempts to convey regional dialects or mispronunciations 2192009 ThursdayApril122001 It ain39t nice to speculate on another man39s demise LAT story an 98yearold S CarolinaSen Strum Thurmond s explained Louise MimsY the generous 5 out Erogrietor health and who might replace him But in places such as Mims39 Corner Store in Edgefield which looks just as it should with corncob pipes dangling from the wall buckets of seeds on the floor and dusty old men sipping Bud and watching The Price Is Right such conversation draws some hard And Strom ain39t going anywhere anyway Y39all just wasting your time looks 25 5 Partial quotes Orphan quotes singleword quotes 7 Use partial quotes for clarity and breVIty 7 Use orphan quotesmwhen you to make it Clear P007 We re 90an tor my boys are 90an t0 Whip that the word is the speaker s and not the their ass on the court tomorrow night the Lakers reporters coach Phil Jackson said 39 better The Lakers are going to whip their ass coach Phil Jackson said 27 28 Bailey said he didn t believe peace in Northern Punctuation for quotes Ireland was possible because he did not trust Catholic scum Punctuation goes insrde quotation mark Our poverty of values spares no group Quayle said Quayle said Our poverty of values spares no group 2192009 Quayle said the nation s poverty of values running quotes spares no group At the beginning of the presentation Davidson produced a 9 millimeter handgun and began firing at panel members Sgt Rod Vandiver He fired more than 20 rounds reloading once The three students at the presentation were not hurt Davidson apparently did not intend to injure them he added What s going on here he asked don t need a comma afterthe question mark running quotes with partial quotes Use a colon to introduce multisentence Sgt Rod Vandiver said that as the presentation quotes got under way Davidson produced a 9 millimeter handgun and began firing at panel members The three students at the presentation were not hurt Davidson apparently did not intend to inure them Vandiver added Sgt Rod Vandiver said At the beginning of the presentation Davidson produced a 9 millimeter handgun and began firing at panel members He fired more than 20 rounds reloading once Only one piece of punctuation at the end of PM SAID baf e the name quot39V When a the quote description or explanation of the person Reporters need to read their copy and ask Is follows the name this what I want to say Can I say it more clearly the writing coach said Do NOT use a comma with the question mark ceary 2192009 wrong Our poverty of values spares no group said Quayle right Our poverty of values spares no group Quayle said right Our poverty of values spares no group said Quayle who is a likely GOP presidential candidate Photos with stories Walk of Fame Singeractor Randy Travis smiles as he touches his star on HI the Hollywood Walk of Fame during dedication ceremonies in Los Angeles Hollywood district Wednesday Travis has been a prominent voice in country music for nearly 20 years and has won numerous Grammy and other awards and has appeared in several Spaceship ight SpaceShipOne comes in for a landing after making its suborbital ight as feat and mleylsmn the Mojave Aerospace Ventures Team attempts 10va and senes AP to win the Ansari X Prize in Mojave Calif on PhOtOReed saxon Wednesday The 10 million prize goes to the rst team to launch the weight equivalent of three people into suborbital space twice within a two week period During its 81minute ight SpaceShipOne climbed to 337500 feeti nearly 10000 feet above its target said Greg Maryniak executive director of the X Prize Foundation The craft made more than two dozen unexpected rolls as the fat fuselage and spindly white wings shot skywardAP Photo Jim Campbell POOL Jack Daniels Peggie Jean Bean inspects bottles of Jack Daniel s Old No 7 Black Label whiskey before they are boxed at the distillery in Lynchburg Tenn on Wednesday The famed sippin whiskey which advertises a recipe traced back to the nation s rst registered distillery has lowered the alcohol content of its agship brand Old No 7 Black Label AP PhotoMark Humphrey Spaceship SpaceShipOne designer Burt Rutan and BOOkseuer pilot Mike Melvill wearing white cap take to the Rueben Mar tinez owner stage in MOJave Ca11f Wednesday after the ight of Li breria of the spaceship Ignoring a warning from Rutan Martinez to abort the ight Melvill took the stubbylooking Books an rocket plane on a corkscrewing whiteknuckle ride Game on past the edge of the atmosphere completing the rst Mainrgtreet stage of a quest to win the 10 million Ansari X Prize AP Photo The Bakers eld Californian Henry once sold A Barrios books out of 39 hisbarbershop He helps Latino children learn to read and aspiringauthors to publish Ana Venegas The Orange County Register Jeanne death James Jones Jr with his children Catiah 3 James Jones III 15 and his wife Stacey all of West Palm Beach watch a movie at the Red Cross Shelter located at the Palm Beach County Convention Center in West Palm Beach Fla Wednesday The Jones family James his wife Stacey and their four children relocated from Dearborn Mich before Hurricane Frances AP PhotoPalm Beach Post Isr ael Palestinians Palestinians inspect the rubble of an of ce belonging to Ham as after it was hit by Israeli helicopter re in Gaza city Thursday morning Israeli helicopters red missiles into the Ham as of ce in response to the earlier attack by Palestinian militants who red a rocket into a street in the Israeli town of Sderot killing two preschool children who were playing in a yard AP Photo Adel Hana Jeanne Bush President Bush walks past an uprooted orange tree as he and Florida Gov Jeb Bush right tour damage from Hurricane Jeanne at an orange grove owned by Marty and Pat McKenna in Lake Wales Fla Wednesday AP PhotoTampa Tribune lIichael Spooneybarger Israel Palestinians 2 Yahya Jabara cries during the funeral of his father 46year old Sael Jabara at the family house in the village of Salem south of the West Bank town of Nablus Wednesday J abara a taxi driver was shot Monday by Yehoshua Elitzur an Israeli settler from the nearby settlement of Itam ar According to the settler he shot in selfdefense after Jabara tried to run him off the road The Palestinian passangers of the taxi say the shooting was unprovoked Police sources say that they believe the settler and that that he is suspected of manslaughter and not murder AP PhotoNasser Ishtayeh Iraq US soldiers block off access during a raid at Haifa street in Baghdad Iraq Wednesday Iraqi security forces backed by US troops arrested six suspected terrorists operating on Baghdad s Haifa Street on Wednesday AP PhotoKhalid Mohamm ed Jeanne Haiti AHaitian farmer walks through a destroyed banana platation outside Gonaives Haiti Wednesday Hurricane Jeanne wiped out vast areas in Haiti s farming communities threatening to leave the country without food AP PhotoKent Gilbert Iraq 2 Police of cers try to calm the public after ring in the air to disperse a demonstration by followers of radical Shiite cleric Muqtada alSadr in the holy Shiite city of Karbala Iraq Wednesday Hundreds of thousands of Shiites are expected to visit Karbala s holy shrines of alHussein and alAbbas sons of Imam Ali one of the most revered Shiite holy men AP Photo Hadi Mizban Colombia FILE PHOTO Students protest the kidnapping of Daniela Vanegas left in this April 2004 le photo Daniela 14 was kidnapped in Bogota on Oct 6 2003 as she was boarding her school bus On Wednesday her father Miguel Angel Vanegas was summoned to the city morgue Authorities suspected a body that hadbeen discovered stuffed into a large plastic bag in a poor Bogota neighborhood was hers but they needed a positive identi cation from the father AP Photo Fernado Vergara File Hungary Ferenc Gyurcsany Hungary s new prime minister is taking the of cial oath of of ce as the Hungarian Parliament elected him prime minister on Wednesday in Budapest Hungary AP Photo Bela Szandelszky Photos Without stories 89lst sendoff Zachary Shaffer 6 cries as he hugs his father Vernon Shaffer following the formal farewell ceremony for the 891 st Engineering Battalion Company B of the Kansas Army Guard in Coffeyville Kan Wednesday afternoon Vernon will join go with the 891st to train in Fort Sill Okla before assisting with Operation Iraqi Freedom AP PhotoIndependence Daily Reporter Karen Lee Mikols Nightclub re Guest affected by The Station nightclub re gather around the entrance of a butter y garden prior to its dedication ceremony Wednesday Sept 29 2004 at Roger Williams Park Zoo in Providence Rl The gardens which will open to the public on Thursday will be a permanent memorial to the 100 people who died in the Feb 20 2003 re and to recognize the more than 200 people injured and others affected by the blaze AP PhotoVictoria Arocho Jack Daniels Peggie Jean Bean inspects bottles of Jack Daniel s Old No 7 Black Label whiskey before they are boxed at the distillery in Lynchburg Tenn on Wednesday The famed sippin whiskey which advertises a recipe traced back to the nation s rst registered distillery has lowered the alcohol content of its agship brand Old No 7 Black Label AP Photo Mark Humphrey u Laura Bush First lady Laura Bush has her picture taken as she visits with the crowd during a rally Wednesday at the Curry County Fairgrounds in Clovis NM The rst ladyt urged a mostly Republican crowd in this eastern New Mexico city to reach outto Democratic and independent voters to help win the state and reelect her husband to a second term AP PhotoClovis News Journal Eric Kluth Paint Paris Hamilton of Ely applies a fresh coat of wood stain to the wall behind a decorative clock on the side of the Piragis building in Ely Wednesday afternoon Wednesday s sunny skies and mid 60 degree temperatures drew people outside to try and nish up their summer and fall projects before wet cold weather arrives on Friday AP Photo Mesabi Daily News Mark Sauer Hotel Strike Joe Tong a cook at the Mark Hopkins Inter Continental hotel walks a picket line outside of the Mark Hopkins Hotel in San Francisco Wednesday Hotel workers began a twoweek strike targeting four San Francisco hotels after working without a contract for more than six weeks An estimated 1200 workers are picketing the Argent Hotel Hilton San Francisco Crowne Plaza Union Square and Mark Hopkins InterContinental AP PhotoPaul Sakuma Chapter 6 Exercise 7 Fault Line You are a copy editor with the Los Angeles Sun Using The Associated Press Stylebook as a guide edit the following news article for style spelling grammar logic syntax and factual errors Also correct any awkward writing Include comments about any information in the story that is incomplete or illogical much more damaging Researchers led by Harvard University Geologist geologist John Cherry recently discovered a previously unknown fault that runs from downtown Los Angeles under Dodger Stadium to nearbyBrea Although the 2516155mi1e active fault is considered short by geological standards the potential for destruction remains high Cherry estimated that the fault that m is sectioned into SMdi erent patches could generate ea h quakesearthguakes ranging from a magnitude 67 to 7 0 mageit ude depending on whether the individual parts rupture or if the entire fault moves at once Cherry compared what will now be called the Puente Hills fault to the one that created m the Northridge earthquake It logically follows that the Puente Hills fault could cause similar type of damage because it is the same type of fault Cherry sayss But because of the proximity to the LrAr area it could create significantly more damage 71 39 t n 13 at nm pm 1 t 14 am In 4th v u 39I A l I i that h 7 fault m b h blind thrust blind thrust fau ltsBoth the Puente Hill fault and fault that caused the Northridge earthguake are blindthrust faults There is a compressional force in the LA basin area Cal State Fullerton Geology geology Professonprofessor Steve Gorem explained It is occurring on the Paci c plate which is being pushed into the North American plate Because you can t see the fault at the surface that is why it is called blind There are probably many more blind faults in the LA basin that haven t been discovered yet This fault lies in stark contrast to that of the San Andreas fault which has carved a crack through the Earth s surface Those types of faults are easy to recognize Discovering the Puente Hills fault and others like it take more indepth research Geologists discovered the fault using data obtained from oil petroleumcompanies Aeoerdin g te Goremr M the data from these companies has haiiust recently been made accessible to the public Cherry said that in blindthrust blindthrust faults folds of rock develop beneath the surface of the earth The world s largest deposits of natural gas lie in these folds and oil companies are constantly searching for these deposits Now geology researchersgeologist can put this data to another use The interest in the concealed faults heightened after the Northridge Eearthquake and in the fact that it occurred on a concealed fault saidChenyiid Now that researchers know about the fault there their next step is to predict when it will cause an earthquake Geologists will use carbon dating among other tools to look at the rocks and determine when it the fault possibly last moved What we have to worry about is how much energy has been stored up from when it last moved Gofum Gorem c0nfirm spelling said Four months ago researchers knew nothing of this fault Cherry said that even though this Puente Hills fault is similar to that of Northridge it doesn t mean the same event will necessarily happen In a nutshell it doesn t increase the risk or likelihood of an event it just says that it could happen Chem said Page Layout Exercise No 1 7 my FBI drug Sweep nd three tan or maruuana in one dawney home Ham Sluden g murder ur teeth text Wrap don39t end lines in heads with hyphens 4 tons of marijuana seized main head should be on left vary head sizes more mug at bottom of story 4 col heads are only 1 line mug awkward at bottom of story Swimm aneited bumping Vamp heads 3yearold glrllmsarmlncarazddem am ng no b While Vesmlng herzrvear in m r hanurstudnm umping nmnmdm w in heads ormurder put head eluW photo Amnn n ma auuluuns nan swecvilw up w namnsslnging mm 4 col heads are only 1 line competing dominant are 3 lines maximum with 2 col heads vary headline sizes with largest at top American Idol fever rising WW heads sentenced to life in prison 3 ms Woman or man39uana sitar plotting m kill former mm mm In Dom w good dominant art head should be under photo mug not worth 2 cols have to use vertical rules between all stories if you between one nude dancing club closed 1 line for 4 col heads vary head sizes Dail News a Student gets life for murdering math tutor Law enroroemem npens rst regional summons c wrung up w m quotm quotirked use n m bumpmg awn icSAdENS Yum head s Covina student didn39t kill math tutor she talked others into doing for her avoid bumping heads OK to caption headline above photo here but still need head w story Covina unof cially m TV USA wwnev muse rst strip club 5 amid controversy Tree City head must connect to story wide text hard to read and much too gray 1 line heads with 4 cols spacing for text bEIX Agems seize marijuana during raid in Downey r i 4 W i almml be mod 15 5 39thml ngmu m trashy m Niqnm ma Miami Amer m nim mion mg um ee aw in v USA mi mm m mm mm m 5 wine n not modular more space between elements standalone quotAmerican Idolquot photo needs headline top head should be much bigger and varythe sizes of the heads not enough space between elements make bottom of cols even Sexnimmer nan mm Fm 15455 or mama mm as Angeles am homes Armory Ans Center mnwauun mmplctc Wuman sLmenrzd m Not modular heads all the same size lower right corner gray no more than 4 lines on 1 col head hard for readerto understand that story continues below photo and the photo is too small to see what39s going on make 2 cols looking at sentencing story text can39t wrap higher than the first col Armory head has to connect with story Z year Dld girl dies after drinking wine 7 Thing r cropped nut mommm Emma gm Wang Mme mm Amie lire girl39s photo distorted rest of heads are too small frame photos need head over last col of quotAmerican Idolquot story too much space between some elements map look better as 2 col quotCoyote troublequot doesn39t say anything make head 2 lines and explain what39s story is about 2nd line of hero storytoo short only 1 line with 4 col head bottom right corner very grey sex offender 1000 yrds from school him i 39 r restricted in h blah blah V good dominant art bumping heads at top and bottom of page too many lines in chimp head and he39s restricted from seeing his human friends drop head forthe story is too big use pt size in quotparagraph drop headquot style don39t abbreviate quotyardsquot head in middle of page is too big bottom of cols aren39t even spacing off between elements don39t make text 2 cols and don39t centertext quotAmerican Idolquot photo is distorted Teen mother abandons newborn in trash Lume girl becomes a llttle hero aner rescueing brother nice head on lead story top half of the page looks good bottom of hero caption should be even with bottom of story don39t put unrelated photos next to each other too many lines on autism head every photo needs a caption if you put rule above 1 story you have to put rule above all stories in paper leave 1 pica on either above and below need more white space around pull quote a ev its rst day Puean nice top headline though it needs to be bigger nice layout all heads are 30 pt except young hero varythe sizes the Puente Hills trail head ortrail entrance opened not the trail pull quote in the strip club and American Idol stories would break upthe gray perhaps use a different American Idol photo and use this one in the middle col of the story need a little more space between some of the elements FBI con scates 3 tons of marijuana cum supervisors hast BBQ ad ptlon Program at meetings memnnnl Fire ep mcmlls ngm large res good size on lead story head but FBI seized 4 tons not 3 tons more space between some of the elements woman wasn39t charged with murder of tutor she was convicted of plotting his death only 1 line with 4 col heads looking at fire story recruits is misspelled type can39t wrap higher than the first col capitalize department use 4 col hed with map in cols 2 and 3 if you use a rule above fire story you need rules everywhere else single quotes around quotAmerican Idolquot lower right is too gray bottom of cols are not even Thousands iine u 7 1w Amencan Kdui no dominant photo too much space between some of the elements frame photos bumping heads all heads are 30 pt vary sizes with largest at the top 2 col heads have a maximum of 3 lines it Board of Supervisors tenyearold needsto be hyphenated and don39t end lines with hyphens Ieen held in friend s shooting death mmnv ghts w am pm 0mm mm mm 1 39 quotWear pm we m mmnzr Mame rm 7 um m m on sum mm Mum w hnnw afswt 11 an Laves Cum resmem unhauuy exam at Pasadena cw cauegu Resrdents or Shadysrde nha Wm makeshwft parkmg uL nice size for lead head but the rest are 30 pt vary sizes hard for readerto tell that story continues under photos don39t bump heads click to read carsales deck head don39t repeat key words l 7 7 7e Teen held in friend srshooting death of pet chimp People ian on Shadyside venue Want City ECLan tookthe previous page a tweaked it a little now we have a variety of head sizes and no bumping heads don39t like Sept 11 sounds like mural honorterrorist attack 9252008 Parallel construction In lists and sentence structure use consistent grammatical construction verb tense language voice Parallelism gives lists and sentence structure flow It can create a rhythm emphasis and drama as it clearly presents ideas or action Use parallel structure with verb forms Original A reporter s typical day might consist of meetings with editors interviews with sources and writing stories Edited A reporter s typical day might consist of mm editors interVIewmg sources and Mg stories Original The qualities of a good reporter include a curiosity aboutthe world writing well a keen sense of observation and asking insightful questions Edited The qualities of a good reporter include a curiosity aboutthe world a keen sense of quot quot the ability to Wine well and the insight to ask probing questions Other wording in the sentence should also use parallel structure original Zoo officials said Friday thatthe pandas were adjusting well to their new habitat and the public would be allowed to visit the exhibit in about two weeks edited Zoo officials said Friday M the pandas were adjusting well to their new habitat and that the public would be allowed to visit the exhibit in about two weeks USATimes 6Jan08 The storms have been blamed for at least three deaths and hundreds of thousands of homes and in California Oregon and Washington were without power Saturday 9252008 edited The storms have been blamed E at least three deaths and M power outages in hundreds of thousands of homes and businesses in California Oregon and Washington on Saturday The first sentence of a magazine article on sneakers A long time ago bef sneaker companies had the marketing cloutto spend millions of dollars sponsoring telecasts of the Super Bowl m street gangs identified themselves by the color of their Adidas before North Carolina State s basketball players found they could raise a little extra cash by selling the freebie Nikes off their feet and m a sneaker s very sole had been gelantinized Energized Hexalited torsioned and injected with 39 gas sneakers were well sneakers From a story about a women s basketball coach Back and forth she paces in front ofthe players bench four long strikes right four long strides left spine like a ruler shoulders squared eyes riveted to the court Parallel structure exercise Parallel structu re Which of the following pairs of sentences has the better parallel construction 1 a My cousin picks the berries boxes them and sells them to the markets b My cousin picks the berries boxes them and he sells them to the markets a My cousin picks the berries boxes them and sells them to the markets 2 a The car s cost is not as important to me as how it handles b How much the car costs is not as important to me as how it handles b How much the car costs is not as important to me as how it handles 3 a The president said he is commander and chief and that he takes responsibility for the wars the high casualty rate b The president said he is commander and chief and he is responsible for wars the high casualty rate b The president said he is commander and chief and he is responsible for wars the high casualty rate 9252008 4 a She is an expert on caring fortrees indoor plants and how to maintain a good lawn b She is an expert on caring fortrees indoor plants and lawns b She is an expert on caring fortrees indoor plants and lawns 5 a Neither what he said nor how he said it matters to me b Neither his comments nor how he made them matters to me a Neither what he said nor how he said it matters to me 6 a She has a Saint Bernard that refuses to be housetrained yet she has a doctorate in animal psychology b She has a Saint Bernard that refuses to be housetrained yet has a doctorate in animal psychology a She has a Saint Bernard that refuses to be housetrained yet she has a doctorate in animal psychology 7 a To take bribes is no worse than offering them in the first place b Taking bribes is no worse than offering them in the first place b Taking bribes is no worse than offering them in the first place 8 a Norman either wants something or he has had a personality change b Either Norman wants something or he has had a personality change b Either Norman wants something or he has had a personality change 9252008 9 a ltwas time to bear down and win the next point b ltwas time to bear down and forwinning the next point a ltwas time to bear down and winthe next pomt 10 a Not only was the catvicious but it was also ugly b The cat was not only vicious but it was also ugly b The cat was not only vicious but it was also ugly 1 r The Orange Cahhtl 774me um Alleged teen rape vrcrom leaves newborn baby In trash Runaway dog ream in family t Former student at Z vearroic gins ans CH5 m my new 7 aimr drinking alconol 39 g 39 r 5 7 zone cell gemyes allowed at High schuots have Harem conc rneu New Park a t 39 1 Opening Soon Pop and drag a with he an oi holly dnncmg 1 heads all the same sizes spacing is OK bottoms of cos aren t even CHS doesn t convey any info cell phone head is incorrect and unclear pop and drop it doesn t make any sense mug of Helen Mo should be in col 4 type has to wrap under head or related photo frame photos The Daily Tuffy no dominant art more space between elements photos aren t framed map is too big heads are much too small Single quotes around TV show and movie titles in heads strip club head is inaccurate re head doesn t re ect focus of story all type should be 1 col strip club photostory aren t modular 7Z6 DdcazutLL39 y J photo goes with lead story package isn t modular American Idol photo poorly cropped mug would look better as halfcol frame photos needs captions spacing too tight Highlight Times 10yearotd39g lrl 0555 am in eroxc39ac t t vquot top head needs to be 6 cols and much larger mug is distorted frams photos The Informer frame photos needs much bigger heads format text as soon as you place it heads much too small too few stories on page spacing is too tight The Banner Anntenor unll l5 Toddler death frame photos more space between elements need rule above top photo if use rules elsewhere more space between elements FBI seized FOUR tons pot in LA area Sentenced to life in prison head doesn t say much The Titzu39l Times A hero at loYearsOld sister saves little brother 1 frame photos too much space between top storyphoto and what s beneath it use pull quote if story is short as in the marijuana story need to nd solution for short col in hero story hero story head should say 10yearold lower case and don t pluralize year bad grammar and inaccuracy in mural story Artists creates there was only one artist good dominant art need single quotes around American Idol heads look to be more or less the same size 0 Daily Start singing Pasadena Idol ls ln town Marijuana seized in osAngeE bumping heads at the top ofthe page bring American Idol photos up and use 2 col head This will also eliminate bumping heads heads all look to be the same size no strong dominant art frame photos bumping heads in the middle of the page why centered headline make bottom of cols even Daily News I I Covma Student gets WE for plotting to murder mam mm more space between elements frame photos arts center head needs to connect to story it shouldn t be above the head single quotes around American Idol arts center heads need the word art good dominant art lllf DlllLllilll llESS Woman gets life in prison for death oftutor 911 mural opens at Pasadena City College 4 4 other 3 mns a marijuana seized ln lederal raid good dominant art though 6 cols may be over kill page should have at least 5 stories arts center head needs to connect to story it shouldn t be above the head good use of thumbnail mug betterto move hero photo up and use 1 col head to keep heads from bumping INSIDE DAILY Inna FBI seizes 4 tons of pot from homes NEVWI may in to blame rm death dyaung gm Student imprisoned for pl rvg murder E marran Idol draws h overall a nicelooking page good dominant art good lead head size though some other heads are too small ifyou put vertical rule between hero and 2 yrold s death story then you need vertical rules between all stories need quotes around American ldol put thumbnail halfcol further down in the story to break up gray at bottom of page poor choice of photo with American Idol story it s too small to see what s happening use light bulb man photo heads are too small frame photos loryearroid gm savesher quot H v brother in car crash and v 5 becomes a hometown hero V S Ky L395 u math39 i m in mm iv 39v L mm a mu mix 323 large meme ui rm nre ghler VECrLit quotcm um t ion mm no more than 3 lines on 2col heads more space between re head and story above it capitalize security in Homeland Security make bottom cos even need quotes around American Idol why is American Idol an odd co size The Puppy Times m Wm m i w an Efforts delayed in removing sex offender Three tons of nice page though the murder plot story takes up too much space and is gray good spacing between elements head should say FOUR tons of marijuana seized American Idol photo is teasing story inside paper projeCE approved for revival San Gabr39 l R Residents 39 AlumnaMW lGreymgchimpmlssedbyl ormer WWW WWW erscusmdyissuesaconcem rlnyoarlol 5 2 30 pt 39 36 pt earold Boy Scout saves hie her Scout choking on Zipper 13 of o pt competing dominant art top head should be a little larger could say San Gabriel River revival approved map should be 1 col lead head should be larger Chimp head should be larger than 36 pt style grAying no grEying don t use 24 pt heads on open pages a page with no ads lower case zipper in Boy Scout head story doesn t say if choking victim was a Scout lower case autistic head should focus on what parents learned at seminar rather than a seminar was held use byline paragraph style top head is too close to storyphoto missing the photo credit big areas of gray on the page need more space between car lot head and story why vertical rule will need to use it consistently throughout the paper Teen to be tried 30 pt Low wages and an aging work force threateng childrcare 39 aliforn39 nice page good dominant art vary head sizes more with bigger heads at top of page stylebook says child care is two words with no hyphen in all uses make sure bylines are properly formatted bottom of cols of childcare and teen stories should be even don t repeat key words child care in deck head also bad grammar in the deck head need end quote on pull quote 39can Idol lures Pasadena39s talented i i l 42 pt g Miniature ow 30 pt I Family s pet chimpanzee continues to a Vmitful future in 8 Zoo facility 7 r Autistic expereience ecreated by nice dominant art American Idol package isn t modular last 2 cols are lower than the rest quotes around American Idol better head would be Amen can ldol lures region39s talented bring owl photo up and make owl head 2 cols this will avoid bumping heads only one line on 4 col heads and need more space above and below chimp head Autistic head bottom 2 lines are much too short Chimp head doesn t re ect story owl head too close to story above it American Idol photo is smallerthan its frame and it s missing a caption belly dancer caption needs photo credit make bottom of cols even education r v Whittier bans public parking of bigrigs glVe on Community group gets new digs good dominant are good size for main head SG River head should be 36 pt a little more space between river photo and caption big rig is 2 words with no hyphen lower case autism and say what happened ParentseXpe encekid sautism no comma after Tree City lower case art 911 head is too close to story make sure bottom of cols are even American Idol story missing a word draws 10000 ECity of Roses 9 fallen w anrlg39ba 1 cars bemg sold near homes l l A need deck head with honor student to explain why she s going to prison map is worth 3 cols would look better using mural photo as dominant art it looks oating on text like that with no caption mural head should be 42 pt with other heds 36 and 30 more space between elements why indent on firefighters head head on used cars head needs to touch rst col of story move the map over to the far right col pull quotes should be 1 col don t let them stretch into next col better to center pull quote between cols so reader will understand that text doesn t wrap into next col use car map is distorted bullying head is boring include something the speaker said make bottom cols even who does them refer to in re ghters story Woman sentenced to life in prison Club shut down for lack permit 42 Americanm draws 10000 City of Roses P for usedcar lot 5 36 pt nice dominant art nice head sizes need deck head with honor student to explain why she s going to prison you can make it 3 cols 1 line usecar lot head doesn t make sense cell phone head is incorrect full legislature hasn t voted on it yet and if passed and signed into law it would allow school districts ur cell phones page needs 1 or 2 deck heads Chapter 5 Exercise 5 Drug Dealer You are a copy editor at the Newport News Review Using the Associated Press stylebook as a guide edit these sentences from news articles for style spelling grammar logic syntax and factual errors Also correct any awkward writing Include comments about any information in the story that is incomplete or illogical WA suspected drug dealer who had just been arrested and handcuffed by police jumped to his death from the 10th oor balcony of his hotel room early Friday morning John James Johnson 27 was killed instantly said Sgt John Aimey of the Newport Beach Police Department AFmey would Aimey said Johnson had sold 3 ounces of cocaine earlier Thursday evening to two undercover police of cers who had gone to Johnson s room at the Marriott Hotel in Newport Center The of cers returned at 130 am to arrest him After handcu ing him investigators told Johnson to sit in a chair which he did Aimey said But while authorities searched the room Johnson jumped up sprinted through an opening in the slidingglass door and onto the 3f 99t wide patio where he tumbled over the railing The momentum of body and the speed of his run carried his body to the balcony railing where he lost his balance and tumbled over the railing said Detective Bob Martinez iid Police investigators could not determine if Johnson intended to commit suicide or lost his footing while trying to escape An autopsy is scheduled next week Marriott representatives would not comment on the incident
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